雅思写作范文解析.

2017-08-07 作者： 552阅读

　　雅思考试中雅思写作部分我们千万不能丢分，因为雅思写作算是比较容易拿分的，所以能拿的分数我们千万不要丢了，对于雅思写作真题的训练也是必须的，想要自己的雅思写作分数高，我们就得不断的加强自己。

　　下面小编就来介绍一下雅思写作中的雅思写作范文以及雅思写作真题吧。

　　1、题目

　　Children who grow up in families without large amounts of money are better prepared to deal with problems in their adult life than children who are brought up by wealthy parents. Do you agree or disagree?

　　题目点评：

　　这道题是IELTS writing task 2当中比较少见的“看着容易写好太难”的题目(很多IELTS作文题目看起来很难，写好却不一定特别难)。咱们首先要注意区别“families without large amounts of money”和“poor families”这两个概念的差异，前者不仅仅指“low-income families”还要包括“middle-income families”，所以题目的意思和一些同学概括的“穷人的孩子早当家”不同;另外一个误区在于因为这道题目和中国文化比较贴近，很多同学会举过多的简单生活事例但是却忽视了普遍性推理，导致论证缺乏深度。

　　从论点上看，考虑到多数考生更熟悉中国的国情，肯定是totally agree更好写,布什的内阁里面现在也有拉洋板儿车出身的(不过在美国富豪的孩子当中牛人还是出了不少，四十三位总统里面也有大量富家子弟。

　　从整体上看，在西方有钱的家长更舍得让自己的孩子经历风雨)。既然观点写一边倒，那么结构当然就是五段式——开头段转述题目+主旨句，主体段1讲一般家庭的孩子比富家孩子有更强的心理承受能力，主体段2讲一般家庭的孩子有更强的独立性，主体段3讲普通家庭的家长对小孩的要求往往更严格，结尾段总结上文三层意思。thesis statement和topic sentences，要是少了，扣分没商量哦!

　　素材：

　　income gaps 指收入差距

　　income inequality 指收入不均

　　intergenerational 两代人之间的

　　turn the tables 是个idiom,有点像中文说的"打翻身仗"

　　offspring 孩子

　　counterpart 相对应的人(或事物)

　　meritocratic society 说白了就是“凭本事吃饭的社会”

　　self-restraint 自制能力

　　infancy 婴儿期

　　frugality 勤俭

　　financial strains 说白了就是缺钱，名词

　　well-off / affluent(adj) / well-to-do/ well-heeled / wealthy 都是有钱的意思，实在弹尽粮绝了还可以再用一个moneyed(adj),

　　autonomy 自己管理自己，名词

　　initiative 主动性

　　well-acquainted 对某事很熟悉

　　mitigate 缓解

　　范文：

　　It is widely accepted that we have been living in a “the rich get richer whereas the poor get poorer” age in terms of income gaps within a generation. However , to this day, there has been no consensus yet over the extent to which income inequality is intergenerational. Some contend that the offspring of low-income and middle-income parents can largely grow up to manifest better problem-solving abilities during adulthood than their high-income family counterparts, thereby turning the tables socially and financially. Personally, I believe this is generally the case in any meritocratic society.

　　First and foremost, children raised in households not in possession of a good fortune are conditioned early on in their lives to exercise self-control and self-restraint. These individuals learn from their infancy onward that not everything they crave will become theirs instantaneously. Every so often their wishes go beyond their parents’ means and they have to come to terms with the resulting sense of frustration or rejection. Throughout the childhood and early adulthood years they are tempered by the repeated experiences of parents’ denial of their requests and frugality is inculcated into their minds as a virtue. Consequently these children, for the most part, are apt to interpret scrimping and saving, emotional uneasiness, not infrequent financial strains and menial first jobs as an integral part of life rather than a devastating ordeal. Hence they end up being better able to manage stress in their adult years and less likely to panic or get daunted when problems occur.

　　Further, children brought up by parents of low or middle economic status often grow up to be physically, mentally and professionally more independent than children brought up by affluent parents. It goes without saying that children whose parents are not particularly well-off are more likely than children of affluent households to know how to get the most out of a modest allowance, if they ever get such a thing at all. To the former group of children, most desirable things in life have to be “earned”—that is, more often than not they must put forth great fort bore their desire is fulfilled. On the other hand, busy, low or medium salaried parents translate into more autonomy and initiative on the children’s part. This originally disadvantaged group becomes spontaneous and handy through crafting toys on their own, resourcul by cooking their own meals, tactful with coaxing their parents into buying them gifts, intelligent thanks to the absence of private tutors, savvy in doing summer jobs, and above all, unrelenting in pursuing their dreams.

　　Lastly, non-wealthy parents typically have higher and more dinite aspirations for their children than well-to-do parents. Well-acquainted with all the disadvantages a meager or fair-to-middling bank account generates, many non-wealthy parents pin their hopes on their children to get their families upwardly mobile. These adults mostly have high behavioral, educational and (subsequently) occupational expectations for their children. As a result, they cannot afford to be permissive parents. Spoiling their offspring rotten is the last thing they care to do and they are always ready to discipline their children when they misbehave. They keep tabs on their children’s grades at school and do not spare the rod when their offspring do not measure up academically. The odds of children raised in such rigorous environments having good problem-solving skills are apparently better than children raised otherwise.

　　To conclude, the chi determinant of individuals’ problem-solving skills is not the amount of money their parents can amass when they are little. Rather, hands-on experience in comprehending, analyzing, resolving ,mitigating or circumventing problems is more essential to the cultivation of problem-solving abilities. Hence, I am convinced that families without great wealth are more advantageous to the development of individual capacity to tackle problems。

　　2、剑6 Test 2 A类大作文，考官范文(部分内容)：

　　As a result of constant media attention, sports professionals in my country have become stars and celebrities, and those at the top are paid huge salaries.

　　Many people find their rewards unfair, especially when comparing these super salaries with those of top surgeons or research scientists.

　　考生在研读考官范文时可以设想，自己写会用什么结构。如第一处：中国学生更倾向于使用从句，比如： Sports professionals receive a lot of media attention so ... 这种结构相比例文缺乏简洁性，但思考起来比较容易，所以考生会在文中反复使用。这就导致文章字数很多，但实际传达的有效信息很少。所以考生应替换掉一些此类结构，换成名词词组作为状语，意思表达更清晰，信息传达更有效率。

　　再如第二处：最成功的运动员，中国学生更倾向于用最高级the most successful players。这并无不妥，但太过于千篇一律，可能相当数量的学生会使用。而考官使用了一个词组at the top 就生动的表示了运动员的成就和地位，是值得学生借鉴的。熟词偏意有时比用难词能达到更好的效果。

　　第三处：认为他们的收入不公平。此处中国学生倾向于使用从句Many people think that their rewards are unfair。同第一处，表达平淡、信息量低。形容词补语的表达方式是学生理解但使用不到位的，应在练写中加强。

　　第四处：当和其他人比较时。中国学生也倾向于在此处使用从句。非谓语、插入语等状语结构，在英语写作中频繁使用。考生如果希望自己的文章更自然，写作中应涉及一定的此类结构。如果句式单一，则会给人僵硬乏味之感，难以突出论述重点。

　　以上就是小编介绍的雅思考试中雅思写作部分的雅思写作真题范文，希望小编的分享能够带给所有想要参加雅思考试的同学们帮助，预祝大家都能够考出自己理想的成绩来哟!