学霸文书斩获常青藤等11所名校 他的文书到底为什么这么牛?

2017-07-18 作者: 153阅读

摘要:文书在美国留学申请过程中占据很重要的作用,在某些情况下甚至是起着关键的决定性作用!最近以为用朴实言语的申请者Cesar Arevalo的文书斩获了包括了4所常青藤、MIT和斯坦福等高校的Offer,究竟他的文书为什么可以获得这么多招生官的肯定呢?

我们知道在申请美国大学的时候,需要递交Personal Statement 或者Essay,也就是我们平时所说的文书!我们要知道文书在申请中的重要作用!很有可能会直接影响到你的申请结果!所以文书的准备对于绝大部分的申请者来讲都会占据很长的申请时间!

但是想要写出来一份好的文书并不是那么容易,想要写出一份收到招生官喜爱的文书就更是难上加难了!但是最近新闻报道中频频出现学霸一篇文书收获全部常青藤院校或者众多名校Offer的事情屡见不鲜!详情请看:2位女学霸横扫常青藤院校 她们的文书到底有多牛?

究竟他的文书到底牛在哪儿呢?为什么会受到这么多院校的青睐呢?有没有什么文书书写建议我们可以利用呢?带着这些问题,澳际君带着而大家一起来看看这篇斩获了包括部分常青藤、MIT等11所院校的文书吧!

文书正文:

As an emigrant from the small and violence-ridden Central American nation of El Salvador, I’ve been raised with the expectation of succeeding in a land of opportunity. While growing up in the outskirts of Downtown LA in the neighborhood of Boyle Heights, I learned that the only way to escape my condition was to receive an education. The examples set forth by my family laid the foundation for my love of learning and motivated me to pursue a higher education; through my pursuit of a better life I discovered a kindling passion for math and science that has driven me to seek a career as an engineer.

My parents sacrificed their time and energy to provide educational opportunities for me. When I arrived in the United States at the age of five, my father worked at a 99 cent store warehouse and my mother worked the graveyard shift at a shirt factory. Eventually, in search of a career, they began taking classes at a community college. It is my parents and their struggles that showed me the value of an education. My brother and sister have similarly followed this path of learning by excelling in school and gaining acceptance into a top-tier university. My parents’ focus on education motivated us to do well in school because they knew it was the only way that we could create our own path toward a better life. Thus, I set out on my path to a better life.

Confronting challenges head-on has been my signature attitude since I entered the American school system. Despite not being a native English speaker, I won third place in a school-wide spelling bee in kindergarten and realized that my status as an immigrant did not mean I was any less capable of competing with those around me. I craved for a chance to challenge myself. This desire burned inside of me throughout my elementary school years - I competed in another spelling bee and made it to the local district level, I led a group of my peers in a district wide math competition where we took home three medals, and gained acceptance to a two- week residential summer science camp at the University of Southern California.

Throughout my middle school years, I found that I was not challenged enough in school; upon realizing this, I sought a way to fulfill that desire that had been so dominant just a few years prior. Soon I found myself taking a 20- minute bus ride to attend a local community college course on Intermediate Algebra. The thought of having to wait for a bus didn’t bother me because I enjoyed going to class everyday, I enjoyed the idea of being on my own, and, most importantly, I enjoyed taking the initiative to seek out challenges.

My tendency to challenge myself academically grew during high school as I tackled higher level science classes. After completing two years of chemistry, I realized it was time to tackle and master physics. I petitioned for the creation of an AP Physics course because I felt that an introductory physics course would not be enough to prepare me for college -level physics. Thus far, the AP Physics class has been one of my greatest challenges and, despite the stress that it brings into my life, I am enjoying every minute of it. Because of my love for math and science, pursuing a career in a STEM field has long since been at the forront of my attention. My family has always encouraged me to explore engineering and gladly helped pay for my trip to Stanford for a summer engineering camp despite having to go into debt to do so. I am gratul for the forts my family has made because they have helped me reach a position where I am able to pursue a higher education.

需要补充说明的是,该位学霸叫做Cesar Arevalo,来自加州的某高中,今年的Offer季一共收到了11所学校的offer,包括6所藤校、4所加州大学分校还有MIT和斯坦福。

小哥Arevalo是第一代美国移民,5岁便来到美国!贫苦并没有阻止父母女里挣钱使Arevalo接受教育!也正是这样坚定了Arevalo求学的一年!因此Arevalo才在文书中以“知识改变命运”为切合点成文并打动了招生官们!

通篇读下来,我们看到这篇文书并没有华丽的辞藻或者高深莫测的语法!更多的是真成和真实地讲述自己的故事!兴许真成才是真正打动招生官的原因!

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