4月GMAT作文机经:Oak city’s new shopping mall.

2017-08-10 作者: 205阅读

  4月5日GMAT换库后,小编为大家收集整理4月份的GMAT作文机经,这篇是关于Oak city’s new shopping mall的文章,分享给大家,希望对大家有所帮助,仅供参考。

  【原始】

作文 是讲一个shopping mall 作者说 去年在OKA(第一个地方)开shopping mall

  是一个错误 好像是什么犯罪率高了什么的 问第二个地方什么的 作文写的不好

  不太记得了

  【考古】11月JJ39

  The following editorial appeared in the Elm City paper.

  “The construction last year of a shopping mall in downtown Oak City was a mistake. Since the mall has opened, a number of local businesses have closed, and the downtown area suffers from an acute parking shortage, and arrests for crime and vagrancy have increased in the nearby Oak City Park. Elm City should pay attention to the example of the Oak City mall and deny the application to build a shopping mall in Elm City.”

  【参考思路】

  1、Gratuitous Assumption——无根据结论: A 不导致B

  1商场的建立不一定导致local businesses关门:shopping mall吸引人气,商场附近会有更多人流,潜在顾客会增多,反而可能使当地的商业繁荣

  2商场的建立不一定导致停车场不足:长期来看,shopping mall会使当地税收增加,政府有更多的钱用来修路和停车场,停车问题会改善

  3商场的建立也不一定导致犯罪和流浪汉增多,商场的建立会增加就业机会,穷人有了稳定的工作就不会去犯罪或者流浪,长期看会减少犯罪和流浪者

  2、有他因

  1local商业关门可能是其他原因造成的,如政府税收太高,当地商人纷纷选择移民

  2停车场不足可能是其他的因素造成,比如正值非洲66国元首集体访问oka市,市政府采取单双号限行,造成车位紧张

  3犯罪和流浪者增多可能是其他因素造成的,比如房价太高,大学生毕业找不到工作,只好选择犯罪或者流浪

  1、 False analogy:(Oak city 和Elm city 不能做类比,因为这两座城市的经济状况,基础设施和生活水平都是不同的。)

  2、可疑调查survey is doubtful(以上提到的几项调查数据全部来源不明,可能不够中立客观)

  【参考范文】

  此范文与该题略有出入,是老版本的题目,请大家在考场上小心:

  老题题干:

  “The construction of last year of a shopping mall in downtown Oak City has done little for the residents of the community. Since the mall has opened, a number of local businesses have closed, and the downtown area suffers from an acute parking shortage. In addition, because the mall’s owner lives in nearby Elm City, the profits derived from sales at the mall are not being returned to the community. These problems, coupled with the increase in trash and litter in nearby Oak City park, demonstrate that Oak City did not use good judgment in allowing the construction of the mall in the first place.”

  In this editorial the author rebukes Oak City for allowing the construction of a new downtown shopping mall. Citing a number of problems that have occurred since the building of the mail, the author concludes that the residents of Oak City have not benited from the mail and that Oak City exercised poor judgment in allowing the mail to be built. Among the problems cited by the author are the closure of local businesses, lack of parking in the downtown area, and increased trash and litter in a city park near the mall. Moreover, the author argues that profits derived from sales are not beniting Oak City because the owner of the mall lives in another city. The author’s argument is problematic in several respects.

  In the first place, the author assumes that addition of the new mall is the cause of the various problems cited. The only evidence offered to support this claim is that the construction of the mall occurred bore these problems manifested themselves. However, this evidence is insufficient to establish the claim in question. A chronological relationship is only one of the indicators of a causal relationship between two events.

  In the second place, the author has focused only on negative fects the mall has had on the city. A more detailed analysis of the situation might reveal that the positive benits for the city far outweigh the problems on which the author focuses. For example, new jobs might have been created for the residents of Oak City, and tax revenues might have been increased for the city. Lacking a more comprehensive analysis of the impact of the mail on Oak City, it is presumptuous on the part of the author to conclude that Oak City’s decision to allow the mall to be built was incorrect.

  In conclusion, the author’s argument is unconvincing. To strengthen the argument the author would have to demonstrate that the construction of the mall caused the various problems mentioned. The author would also have to show that the negative fects of the project outweighed the positive fects.

  以上就是关于Oak city’s new shopping mall的GMAT作文机经的全部内容,考生朋友可以有选择的看看,最后需要提醒各位的是,机经虽然会对我们解题有所帮助,但是在考场中即使题目很像也要避免秒选,最后祝大家都能考出好成绩。

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