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图表写作也算是A类雅思写作的一个特色,而雅思图表写作跟大作文还是很有区别的,雅思图表写作在句式用词上都比较固定,因此,雅思写小作文高分的重点都是在图表描述的逻辑结构上,下面就是澳际整理的一篇关于砖块制作过程的雅思图表写作范文。
【雅思图表写作满分范文】
The process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry can be outlined in seven consecutive steps. First the raw material, clay, which was just below the surface of soil in certain clay-rich areas has to be dug up by a digger.
Then the lumps of clay are placed on a metal grid in order to break up the big chunks of clay into much smaller areas, which fall through the metal grid onto a roller, whose motion further segregates the bits of clay. Sand and water are added to make a homogenous mixture, which is then either formed in moulds or cut into brick-shaped pieces by means of a wire cutter.
Those fresh bricks are then kept in a drying oven for at least 24 and a maximum of 48 hours, several dozens if not hundreds of bricks at a time. The dried bricks are then transferred to a so-called kiln, another type of high temperature oven. First they are kept at a moderate temperature of 200 ℃ -1300 ℃. This process is followed by cooling down the finished bricks for 48 to 72 hours in a cooling chamber.
Once the bricks have cooled down and have become hard, they get packaged and delivered to their final destination, be it a building site or storage.
(215 words)
【考官评语】
Band 9
This response fully satisfies the requirements of the task. All key features of each stage of the process are appropriately and accurately presented. An excellent overview is given at the beginning of the response and this skilfully incorporates part of the rubric, changing the grammatical function, to give a bri summary of the whole process. The message is very easy to read, with seamless cohesion that attracts no attention. Paragraphing, linking and rerencing are all skilfully managed. The language used is very fluent and sophisticated. A wide range of vocabulary and structures are used with full flexibility and accuracy. Only rare minor ‘slips’ can be found and these do not detract from the high rating.
以上就一篇关于如何在砖块制作过程描述的雅思图表写作范文,可以看出这篇范围的逻辑结构还是非常清晰的,从四个方面出发详细的说了这个图表写作话题的内容,整体的结构也很统一。
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