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10月9日SAT作文成文 (范文一) 开头段:三句话写作法 1 观点 I prer adjusting ourselves to new circumstances to remaining unchanged. 2 解释观点=提炼例子中的为什么 (选择式任务要体现出比较) On some occasions, you have no way but to change yourself for new circumstances like cancer if you still have a dream yet to be realized. (改变的优点) On the contrary, if you ruse to gear yourself towards new circumstances, hardly can you survive, let alone realizing dreams.(不改变的缺点) 3 下文的结构提示 The story of Lance Armstrong, an American cyclist who overcame a deadly cancer, could well exemplify my point.
中间段 目的:把已经准备好的逻辑链条变成英文,注意两点 1) 细节 2) 适时点题 第一步:曾经的他 Raised in a single-parent family, Lance Armstrong lived with his mother for over 19 years until he found our his talent for cycling and decided to move out on his own so that he could join the American national cycling team under coach Chris Carmichael. However, he exhibited somewhat traits of a teenager who lacked parental love, such as rudeness and egoism. (点出曾经的性格) To be more specific, in 1990 Amateur World Championship in Japan, he ignored the suggestion of his coach Chris that he was supposed to save energy bore the final charge. Actually, at that time, he quickly pedaled to a big lead in order to show up bore all the competitors. However that charge consumed him too much energy. Finally, he finished eleventh. (点出这人不听别人建议) What’s worse, he didn’t’t give his opponents any respect. Instead, he would shout at them and insult them during races. In response other riders sometimes got in his way on purpose and tried to slow him down. (点出这人很粗鲁) 第二步 得了癌症 However, unfortunately, he was almost sentenced to death by his doctor in 1996 when he informed Lance that he suffered from testicular cancer. At the beginning, he was unable to face the music since he was always so proud of his physique. But doctors warned him that if he kept on wasting time, it would be impossible to cure him. 第三步 决定改变态度 (重要过渡,点题部分) In that case, he had a rethink about himself. For all these years, he had never got somewhere in the cycling field due to his unwillingness to cooperate with his coach and team members. This time if still kept unchanged, he might die later. Therore, confronted with the new circumstance, namely, the fatal cancer, Lance Armstrong decided to change his attitudes towards others in order to overcome the disease and pedal his beloved bicycle once again. (点题,不改变就会死,所以只能改变自己适应新环境) 第四步 具体怎么适应新环境的 More specifically, he listened to the advice of his doctor, who encouraged him to undergo a surgery to remove one of his testicles. After a three-hour operation, he continued to take the chemotherapy. Painful though the therapy was, his body handled the drugs without too many side fects. What’s more, he also strengthened his communication with his doctors. From time to time, Lance talked to his doctors about his treatment and hoped that they could use drugs that wouldn’t destroy his muscles or hurt his chance of returning to cycling someday. 第五步 适应之后的结果 At last, after a treatment of over 1 year, Lance miraculously recovered and returned to the cycling field in 1998. More significant was the fact that he won seven straight victories in Tour-de-France, the World Cup in his field, which was greatly associated with his cooperation with the whole team. 总结(两句话总结法) 1 总结例子 如果不是因为他愿意改变自己配合医生的治疗,他可能也不会战胜病魔夺得冠军。 Had Lance Armstrong fail to change himself and cooperate with his doctors, he might not have conquered the cancer and gained the champion. 2 重述观点 因此我们确实需要改变态度适应恶劣的环境。 Therore, it is necessary for us to adapt ourselves to new environment.
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