看老师修改美国留学申请个人陈述.

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　　美国留学申请个人陈述对很多人来说是一大难点。电子电气工程是美国研究生理工科申请中非常热门的专业，那么ee ps如何写呢?下面澳际小编给大家提供一篇电子电气工程ee个人陈述的修改范例，希望对大家有帮助。

　　修改前：

　　1 previous Education:

　　When in the high school I first used the computer, I was attracted by it. From then on, to become an expert in the field of electrical and computer technology has been my favorite dream. In 2098, successfully passed the most competitive examinations, especially in the mathematics I got the full score (120 out of 120), I was admitted by the Electronic Engineering Department of Tsinghua University which is the most distinguished university in China.(这是中国学生最喜欢的一中开头方式，可是并不符合statement的一般习惯，请学习修改稿的开头方法。)

　　During my academic years, I worked hardly (work hardly 与 work hard 的区别相信大家都知道，这样的错误是不可原谅的。)and obtained good scores in most courses, especially in the basic courses and major courses. When graduation, my overall GPA ranked the upper 10% among about 200 students.

　　Education at Tsinghua University emphasizes practice. In the third year of study, I applied to join the Lab. of Information Systems. In the lab I successfully designed "2Mb/s PCM Digital Interface (32 frames)" which was used in the analogue PBX (Private Branch Exchange). In 1993, I independently designed "Speech Signal Processing Card" which was used in the SUN SPARC station. This card&aposs successful design solved the problem that the SUN SPARC station could not be used to the speech processing and the multimedia application. From these designs I accumulated the experience of hardware development and mastered the knowledge of communications theory and computer technology such as the hardware structure of the RISC computer, UNIX operating system and programming. Through the five years of study in Tsinghua University I have not only mastered rich professional theory but also accumulated strong experience on hardware design and software program. All of these laid a solid foundation for my further work and study.

　　Because of my hard study, as reward, I was recommended to enter the graduate program at Tsinghua directly, waived of the admission test. It is Tsinghua&aposs policy to endow the most distinguished students such prerence. However, anxiously wanting to practice my knowledge in the real work and because of some other reason, I resigned the esteemed privilege.

　　2 Work Experience

　　After graduation, I have been working as an electronic engineer in North China Institute of Computing Technology (NCI). She, awarded as "Chinese royal computing institute", is the earliest and most famous computer institute in China. In the institute I entered a new field --- automation and got the chance to practice my knowledge learned from the university. In order to work better, in these years I have learned some textbooks by myself, such as:

　　Computer Control Technology, Contemporary Control Theory,

　　Electrical Control Technology, Process Control & Automation Device.

　　In more than three years I worked very hard and completed some projects perfectly. Because of my firm skills in hardware and software and strong background of theory, in 1995 I was appointed as the leader to manage and design the computer control system --- "Distributed Control System (DCS)". In the period less than a year, under the cooperation and support of others, my colleagues and I completed the design of system structure, modules&apos development, software system programming and the debugging of the whole system. This system is the Real-time computer control system and can be combined up to the 2048 channels. In the project I independently designed the kernels --- CPU module, two other modules and the I/O interface software. This system is at the leading position in the automation field of China.

　　Electrical and computer engineering is developing fast, in order to keep up with the advanced technology, I lt North China Institute of Computing Technology (NCI) in Aug. 1997 and joined my now working company - a telecommunication research and development center which is supported by North Telecom Corp. and BUY (Beijing University of Yanjiu). This center mainly makes the research and development in the telecommunication field and keep up with the newest telecommunication technology. In this active center, with my strong theory of electronics and working experience, I have made the large devotion to the center and accumulated advanced knowledge of telecommunication in a short time.

　　More than eight years study and work, I have accumulated various kinds of technical experience in the hardware design and computer application. I believe such experience will be a strong basis and good prepare for my future study and research.

　　3 Plan of Study

　　My degree objective is MS and then Ph.D. If possible, my major interest in the future will reside in the following areas:

　　Control Systems, Communications Engineering,

　　Digital Signal and Image Processing, Microcomputer Applications.

　　After completing my program, I will come back China. Cherishing what I have learned at your department, I will have many things in mind to do. I will foster research in the university and devote myself to teaching.

　　I convince that nothing great is ever achieved without enthusiasm, I am excited about electronic research, and I am dreaming of studying under you soon.

　　Could please accept a willing heart and realize my dream?

　　修改后：

　　An experienced electronic engineer trained in China&aposs major cradle of technological talents, I am submitting this document in support of my application for acceptance into your graduate program. With more than eight years of higher learning and quality research behind me, I now stand ready to pursue advanced studies and scale grander heights in my career.(中文通常按照时间先后顺序写文章，而英文往往先写目前情况，因而现在的才是最relevant的。)

　　Presently, I work at a leading Beijing-based center of telecommunications research and development, jointly run by Canada&aposs Northern Telecom Ltd., one of the world&aposs foremost IT enterprises, and the Beijing University of Yanjiu, a major higher-learning institution in IT technologies in China. Engaged in cutting-edge research and development at this center, I have accumulated a lot of advanced knowledge and expertise in IT technologies in a relatively short time.(请注意修改稿是如何过渡的。)

　　I obtained this coveted position at such a respected international establishment on the strength of my research experience at the North China Institute of Computing Technologies, the country&aposs oldest research organization in computer science. Exercising my diligence and creativity, I specialized in automation research and development in this institute, which not only gave me the opportunity to make full use of what I had learned at the university but also spurred me to constantly improve myself. I taught myself Computer Control Technology, Contemporary Control Theory, Electrical Control Technology and Process Control & Automation Device, among other subjects.

　　Because of my strong skills in both hardware and software, I was appointed in 1995 the leader of a team to design the computer control system "Distributed Control System (DCS)". Under my fective leadership, the team completed design of the system structure, development of the modules, and programming of the software, and system debugging all in less than one year. A real-time computer control system, it can be combined with 2048 channels. For this project, I independently designed the kernels --- CPU module, two other modules and the I/O interface software. The system is now a leading product in China&aposs automation industry. (请注意修改稿是如何过渡的。)

　　My research successes were built upon my solid undergraduate training at Tsinghua University, widely considered China&aposs best engineering school. Between 1989 and 1994, I studied at Tsinghua as a major of electronic engineering, concentrating on basic courses as well as courses of my major. These courses solidly grounded me in theories of telecommunications and endowed me with all-round expertise in both software and hardware engineering. At the time of my graduation, my overall GPA ranked me among the top 10% of about 200 students in my grade.

　　Taking advantage of Tsinghua&aposs emphasis on hands-on experience, I did a lot of lab work in my undergraduate studies. In my third year, I joined the university&aposs Laboratory of Information Systems. In the lab I successfully designed the "2Mb/s PCM Digital Interface (32 frames)" used in the analogue PBX (Private Branch Exchange). In 1993, I independently designed a "Speech Signal Processing Card" used in the SUN SPARC station. This successful development of this card ended the situation in which the SUN SPARC station could not be used for speech processing and other multimedia applications. In the course of these projects, I became versed in hardware structure of the RISC computer, UNIX operating system and programming. All this laid a firm foundation for my career advancement.

　　My academic standing was so strong that I was offered acceptance into Tsinghua&aposs graduate school without the normally mandatory admission exams. That was a privilege available to only the very best of each crop of graduating students. (注意“保送”的写法。)But I declined the offer, figuring that I should gain more practical research experience bore I embarked on advanced studies. With several years of challenging research experience behind me, I think the time has come for me to not only undertake graduate studies but also undertake graduate studies in a quality program in the United States.

　　Ideally, I would like to enter into a Master&aposs program that would lead me into Ph.D. studies later on. In such a program, I would like to focus my studies on one or a combination of the following areas: Control Systems, Communications Engineering, Digital Signal and Image Processing, or Microcomputer Applications. I will bring to the program a professional background that you can feel proud of. I am sure that, with your seasoned guidance, I will be able to significantly enrich my knowledge, enhance my expertise, and sharpen my research skills. If you accept me, you should find, some years down the road, that I will be a leading scientist in China&aposs forts to develop its IT industries.

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