很多初次申请美国留学的同学们，都在为准备美国申请文书写作而烦恼，究竟怎样的美国申请文书才能脱颖而出呢?这是很多申请者思考的问题。当然，在准备美国留学申请文书的时候，这些开头写作不能使用。

　　一、救世主型

　　I am a problem solver. I have an impulse as a kind of instincts to solve various problems bore me and enjoy doing that. Since I was a little boy, a voice from President Franklin Roosevelt has constantly hovered around my mind, "The world can be changed by man`s endeavor, …

　　一副救世主的形象，好似世界无“我”不能。小时候就受富兰克林的影响，立志改变世界。这样的美国申请文书写作个人陈述只会让招生委员认为你是个自大、好夸之人，一味不切实际空洞地放大对申请于事无补。

　　二、欲说还羞型

　　Making a right decision at the right time is very important for a young people .At present, I have come to a critical point in my life when I have to make a decision concerning my future course of action. Only a perceptive understanding of oneself will enable one to chart his proper action. After carully thinking, reviewing my life and analyzing my personality, I make the determination and choose to apply for graduate study in XXX. And I choose to specialize in communications which I will pursue a lifelong career.

　　这样的美国申请文书PS开头只能说是名言警句堆砌的门面，虚有其表，毫无重点。美国留学申请文书个人陈述旨在个人历练、个人收获、个人优势....而不是一味空洞的陈词滥调，要直击重点，突出优势，切记华而不实。

　　三、言辞幼稚型

　　Why the gecko can climb on the wall while we can`t? 、Why the leaves turn red in autumn?、How many stars are there in the sky?When I was in childhood, I always kept asking my mom all kinds of questions。I am especially interested in how things work, I can even take apart things for several hours in order to find out its principle.

　　用上来童年记忆凸显你的远大抱负，who cares?天真童趣在这个竞争激烈的申请大军中，收效甚微。与其这样费力的描述自己的童年记忆，不如谈谈自己取得的进步，未来目标，这样来的更实切。

　　以上就是三种美国申请文书开头不能使用的介绍，希望对大家美国申请文书写作有所帮助。如果你还想了解更多的美国留学申请文书问题，可以拨打400-601-0022电话进行咨询，也可以直接点击页面右侧在线咨询按钮直接对话澳际顾问。

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