你的雅思作文句子有效吗?

2017-07-10 作者: 270阅读

句子结构是雅思写作评分标准“语法的多样性与准确度”中一项十分重要的考量因素,但这并不意味着要求考生具备写长难句的能力。在追求输出像雅思阅读一样精到的语言之前,我们首先要确保的应当是写出来的句子是正确的。有效的句子甚而段落通常应当同时满足以下五个要素:一致、连贯、简洁、强调、多样。

1. 一致:如句内的逻辑关系,注意检查是否存在简单推论、逻辑残缺、逻辑悖论、依赖偏见等。

Born in a small town in South Chinain the early 1950s, he grew up to be afamous musician.

→ He was born in a small town in South China in the early 1950s. In hischildhood he liked to sing songs. Later he entered a conservatory. In the 1970she became a famous musician.

2. 连贯:这个问题在平行结构、共用主语、使用指代的情况下尤其需要注意。

We thought she was charming, intelligent, and a very capable young woman.

→ We thought she was charming, intelligent, and very capable.

Or: We thought she was a charming, intelligent, and very capable youngwoman.

He was knocked down by a bicycle, but it was not serious.

→ He was knocked down by a bicycle, but was not badly injured.

Looking out of the window, the grassland stretches as far as the eye canreach.

→ Looking out of the window, we can see the grassland stretching as far asthe eye can reach.

Or: Outside the window, the grassland stretches as far as the eye canreach.

He gave a reason for not attending the meeting, which nobody believed.

→ He gave a reason, which nobody believed, for not attending the meeting.

Or: He gave a reason for not attending the meeting, a reason which nobodybelieved.

3. 简洁:英美文化推崇坦率和直接,通常不需要体现咱儒家文化的含蓄和委婉。

It was small in size and blue in colour.

→ It was small and blue.

He usually likes to drink all kinds of wines that are produced in France.

→ He prers French wines.

4. 强调:正如每篇文章都要有中心思想(main idea),每个段落都要有主题句(topicsentence)一般,每个句子都要围绕一个中心观点清晰地呈现出作者想要表现的重点。

He is modest and hardworking and is a good student.

→ He is a good student, modest and hardworking.

There is a big tree, which is said to be 300 years old, in the temple.

→ In the temple there is a big tree, which is said to be 300 yearsold.

At the sight of the disorderly crowd, he was aware that something bad wouldbe possible.

→ The moment he saw the disorderly crowd, he knew thatsomething bad would happen.

5. 多样:中文重重复,英文重替代,中英差异使然。

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