雅思小作文改写那点事儿

2017-07-10 作者: 58阅读

雅思小作文如果读图没问题并且作文囊括所有信息,就可以拿到比较理想的分数吗?No,No,No!数据类作文也好,图片作文也好都容易落入重复语言的俗套。毕竟数据就在哪里,翻来覆去,流程步骤就是那样,循规蹈矩,地图题好不到哪去,无非就是变来变去。不过我们还是可以“以万变应不变”把小作文写活起来。

(1) 改写题目作为开头段(以OG Test 1为例)

题目:

The chart below gives information on the percentage of British peoplegiving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010.

改变从现在开始:

1. the chart——the bar chart

2. gives——illustrates

3. information——statistical information

4. on关于——regarding

5. percentage——diverse proportion

6. British——UK

7. people giving money to charity——people who gave money tocharity——donating money to charity

8. age range——different age groups

9. for the years 1990 and 2010——in two respective years: 1990 and 2010

见证奇迹的时刻:

The bar chart illustrates statistical information regarding the diverseproportion of people in UK donating money to charity by different age groups intwo respective years: 1990 and 2010.

让世界看到你的改变:亲自动手DIY你自己的开头段

练习1:

The chart below gives information about Southland’s main exports in 2000,*20.., and future projections for 2025. (OG Test 4)

练习2:

The pie chart below shows the online shopping sales for retail sectors inNew Zealand in 2003 and 2013.

练习3:

The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areasof crime in Newport city centre from 2003-2012.

(2) 让主体段摆脱单调从改变主语开始:(剑4满分考官范文给我们的启示):

The table gives a breakdown of the different types of family who wereliving in poverty in Australia in 1999.

On average, 11% of all households, comprising almost two million people,were in this position. However, those consisting of only one parent or a singleadult had almost double this proportion of poor people, with 21% and 19%respectively.

Couples generally tended to be better off, with lower poverty levels forcouples without children (7%) than those with children (12%). It is noticeablethat for both types of household with children, a higher than average proportionwere living in poverty at this time.

Older people were generally less likely to be poor, though once again thetrend favoured elderly couples (only 4%) rather than single elderly people(6%).

Overall the table suggests that households of single adults and those withchildren were more likely to be living in poverty than those consisting ofcouples.

在文章里面画出所有句子的主语我们不难发现,主语可以是数字,代词,题中名词,比重(或趋势)词。那么我们也可以分别用到各类主语来变化我们的句式哦!

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