2017年创意十足的美国大学本科申请essay范文赏析

2017-07-06 作者: 50阅读

美国大学本科申请ESSAY的写作一直是申请者们关注的热点问题。美国大学的申请ESSAY提供给申请者留下的思考空间非常广阔,基本上不会有什么限制,ESSAY给了我们一个环境,那么怎么去 种 这朵 花 ,那是你自己的事情了。

然而,很多学生依然拘泥于修饰,这可能跟小学以来养成写作习惯于赞美的缘故,华而不实的居多,那么如何准备美国大学申请ESSAY?不妨先进行角色转换,假如自己是一个美国人,很好,美国人习惯对人进行赞美,但解决问题或者进行叙事论述,他们确实喜欢的是直接,喜欢论据,例证!下面,让我们一起来欣赏一篇非常有创意的ESSAY,OK,LET S GO!

范文:A Boy s Firsts

The boy is such a common boy. He is so common that only acquainted friends can notice him among the crowd; he is so common that he does not change his girlfriend one time per month, just as those playboys do; and he is so common that his daily life is no more special than those who listen to rock n roll, bet for soccer games and seldom clean their rooms.

However, the boy is somewhat special.

He usually thinks that, his experience and personal achievements, along with his own happiness and grievances, are enough for him to be unique, though he does not have a face as good-looking as Brad Pitt or Keanu Reeves, or whoever.

First Award

It was such a surprising gift for a 12-year-old boy to know that he had won the first prize in the national mathematics competition. The boy clutched the certification and laughed like a sun-flower blooming in a spring morning. He had spent three months preparing for that competition and had lost5kgweight but he was very happy, as happy as you could imagine. Enjoying the pace of enterprising, he began to believe No pain no gain that afternoon.

First Setback

Huddling up in the quilt crying, the boy was introspecting himself. For his haughtiness after achieving the second prize in the National Physics Competition, he deserved the rank of last 5% in the final examination of 7thgrade. Wiping up the tears, he set himself a promise of being humble and sober. The boy kept the promise and became a young man of great maturity.

First cooking

Quite a tough work. The boy said to himself, smearing soap on a blister caused by the burning oil. But a small blister never could stop him from doing his cooking research . The boy stood in front of the gas-stove again, holding apancake turner in his lt hand, he was trying to find out the correct time of adding salt and the appropriate amount of other flavorings. After so many failures, he felt that it was not a simple task of cooking out palatable meals, nut a challenge of surpassing himself. When the boy finally finished working one and a half hours later, he put a sweet smile on his dirty face. The boy wrote in his diary, keep working and you ll win.

First Love

At the age of 16, the boy fell in love with a smart girl. Eating ice-cream with the girl in the ice-cream bar at the street, walking on the boulevard hand in hand, cycling her home and kissing goodbye, he regarded love as the holy thing in his life. Thus, the boy demonstrates a love from heart; he cares everyone nearby and wants them to be beatific with their families. As people say, an angelic soul.

First Job

The extremely hot summer holiday of 16, the boy was excited when he got a job at the local train station as a ticket-taker. First working day, the boy got up so early that when he arrived at the station, the previous ticket-taker was still on his work, in astonishment of the boy s appearance. But the ticket-taker did not know that, the boy was just so eager as to get on the job to show that he had grown up.

Soon a common college student will he be. A common one that will be assiduous in class and passionate in the basketball court; that will make every fort to run for the Chairman of the Student Union but may still face failure; that is no more special than those who spend half a day in libraries and forget to go to dinner when do researches in labs. But somehow he will be a unique college student, because he will have his own way of fulfilling his dreams.

And as you may know, the boy is me.

一口气看完了吗?那么我们来品一品它:

一、标题:

也许,这个标题不算非常特别,但是它引人注目,一个男孩的第一次,可能我们想到更多的是一些 第一次 ,联想到我们自己的 第一次 ,兴趣自然就产生了!

二、结构:

结合了 第一次 的标题核心,下面分别以男孩生活、学习及工作中的各个第一次进行阐述,涉及的面比较全,包括感情,给人的感觉非常丰富且完整。

三、措词:

措词比较洒脱,拖泥带水,既看出一个青年人的活力,又从每个 一次 中发现这个BOY其实不是一般的BOY,他有着一种思想叫做执着与专一!

四、思路:

学习 〉生活 〉感情 〉工作

这看起来更像一个循环,从学习到工作,中间穿插着我们的日常生活和感情生活,这就是一个完整的人,一个完整的体现!

一篇essay范文非常有创意,美国大学本科申请ESSAY的写作思维要开阔,要创新,但是在实际写作中,我们中国的很多学生却是以过往的过眼云烟式的表面化写作居多,A Boy s Firsts这篇ESSAY我们就看不到那些虚华的痕迹,这值得我们借鉴。

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