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在申请的过程中,文书是非常重要的一个环节。文书里面的个人陈述(Personal Statement,简称PS)写作,更是重中之重。PS的写作可以说是申请文书中难度最高也是最重要的部分。很多学生,由于没有很多这方面的写作经验和指导,因此写不出一些关于自己个人特点的个人陈述。这份文件的主要目的是指导如何写出优秀的PS。
什么是PS?
PS是一份你自己向学校做自我介绍的文件,该份文件通过申请人自己的个人称述而展现出你的人格和智力水平。对于所有申请者来说,读懂学校的每个问题,进行细致周全的回答,以及展现出个人的优势,才能够使录取委员会对你的产生兴趣。个人陈述和导师的推荐信一样,都是录取委员会希望通过侧面文件,弥补个人简历和成绩单所表现内容的不足。也就是说,这份文件是为了说服录取委员会录取你。
PS写作常见误区
1.主次不分,缺乏逻辑
很多申请者在进行PS写作之前,由于缺乏对于内容的整体把握而缺乏逻辑,主次不分,读者不知道写作人到底想要表达什么。有些PS什么都想表达,想穿插,但是却写不好。比如我曾经的一个学生就想要在PS里面以便想要表现自己申请专业的诚恳态度,一边又写着对原来专业的困惑,一边有写对于申请地是如何如何向往。几条线叠加在一起,整个PS写的毫无逻辑可言。堪称破烂之极。
2.内容空洞,缺乏事例
对于PS和RL的写作,我一直强调需要学生个人将自己想要突出的特点和一些具体的事例结合起来,以防内容显得太假,让人看了贻笑大方。很多PS写作者,说自己哪方面很有能力,对专业是如何如何有兴趣,学习能力是如何如何强大,动手能力是怎么怎么强,但是却缺乏事例来支持,将这些当做是个人特点,但其实毫无说服力,因为缺乏具体事例支持。一篇好的PS是需要用例子来支持的。
3.措辞啰嗦,缺乏精练
简洁是写作中最重要的,尤其是在英语的写作中。这会体现在今后的翻译上,简洁的句子能够让读者读地很顺畅,让人感觉不会拖泥带水。这样的句子才会是有说服力,举出的事例才能够引起读者的共鸣。
4.字数过多,缺乏亮点
有的同学认为,PS写作越长越好,感觉自己经历了那么多,干脆记流水账一般把自己的一生经历都写上去。殊不知,过长的PS不仅会使读者感觉不耐烦,而且会给录取委员会留下不好的映像。一篇好的PS是应该有逻辑主线的。
PS写作内容
1.了解自己,促销自己
在进行PS写作前,应该要对所要写的人有一个透彻的了解,也就是要了解自己,了解自己的目标,了解自己为什么要选择这个学校,这个项目。录取委员会希望能够通过阅读你的PS,发现一些关于你的趣事,思想深度,展示自我以及非模板化的文章,并以此暗示自己对于今后的学习满怀信心。
2. 突出个人特点
录取委员会希望能够通过PS了解到一些你个人的东西,并以此分析你个人。也就是说,你需要在PS里面体现一些平常人不会和别人分享的东西,比如在PS里面阐释你对于自己人生批判性的思想。对于一篇成功的PS来说,这是很重要的。为了写出成功的PS,你还要好好回答一下的问题:
在你的人生经历中,有过什么特别的,与众不同的,能够给人留下深刻影响的故事?你生命中的一些什么事例,能够让录取委员会认为,你与其他申请者不同,今后一定会很成功?(比如个人或者家庭困扰因素,个人十分显著的成就,一些影响你人生目标的人或事?)
从什么时候开始,你对该领域产生了兴趣,从什么时候开始你开始接触该领域,是什么原因让你选择了该领域,你为什么相信你自己能够在该领域取得成功?(这并不是说要你回答你为什么要选择这个专业,而是需要通过一些你自己的经历和一些启发性的东西来说明,为什么你要选择这个领域?)
你对于这个领域的学习情况,比如自己已经学习过,通过平时的阅读发现的,或者是参加过一些补习班,或者是通过工作以及一些其他的经历,比如实习,和一些成功人士的交谈?
你的未来规划是什么?
大学期间是否参加过很多的实习,如果有,它对你的个人成长产生了什么促进作用?
如果在你的简历中可以看出一些突出的缺点,比如GPA,考试分数等,你是否能够找到一些很好的理由说明原因?
你是否曾经战胜过一些困难?(比如经济,家庭,身体上的)
你自认为你个人具有什么样的特点能够使你在该领域取得成功?(美好品德,热情,耐心等),举出一些具体事例
你有一些什么技能?(领导能力,交流能力,分析能力等)
为什么你比其他申请者好?
你能够说服录取委员会录取的你最佳原因是什么?
以上这些问题都是在PS中最常用,也是最能够充申请人的PS内容的事例。那么具体需要运用什么方法去体现这些方面呢?
a. 讲故事
故事需要体现的是真实性。你可以把你的PS当成是写一个新鲜,动人,与众不同的故事,从所有申请者中脱颖而出。PS写作一定要给人留下深刻的印象。如果你要讲的故事可能过于冗长,而引起录取委员会反感,那么建议干脆不要写。在这个过程中,你可以问下你身边的人,家人也好,朋友也好,你个人的一个比较突出的优势特点是什么。
b. 寻找切入点
很多学生由于生活中缺乏一些戏剧性的东西,因此在PS写作过程中就会遇到很多难题。寻找到一个切入点体现出你的个人魅力所在就变成了一个巨大的挑战。但是这又是很关键的。在这一方面,你可以说一些你与众不同的品质,个人目标,以及之前的表现。
c.注意首段内容
在进行PS写作之前,一定要十分清楚的一点是,第一段十分重要。因为这直接就决定了你是否能够在第一时间吸引到录取委员会的眼球。
d. 体现个人特质
录取委员会会希望从你的PS中找到一些你与其他申请者与众不同的东西,而不是他们所看到过的千篇一律的模板性故事。在其他文件中已经体现的东西,最好不要在PS中体现。
PS段落安排
在PS写作的过程中,段落的安排是很重要的。没有逻辑的排版会显得杂乱无章。我一般建议可以这样写:
第一段:直入主题,阐述你所感兴趣的领域以及原因
第二段:与该领域相关的经历
第三段:工作或者实习经历
第四段:个人爱好,尤其是能够写出与你所申请领域相关的信息
第五段:你的个人目标,以及所选择该所学校的原因。
以上在我们了解了PS写作的基本规则和原理后,那么最后让我们再来看一些很不错的PS范文吧。
范文一
Early in my childhood, the Internet became more than just a luxury--it became a necessity. My father moved from Singapore to Indonesia to start a textile company when I was four years old, leaving me alone with my mother. To alleviate the pressures of separation, I developed the computer skills needed for electronic communication and was able to remain in close contact with my father. This experience solidified my interest in information technology and exposed me to the enormous potential of this developing field.
In the summer of 1992, I exploited my knowledge of IT to help those in my community. I volunteered at a local library, helping people with computer and Internet-related questions. Also at that time, my father s business had launched many technological changes that led to the automation of its production line. These improvements had saved his company from bankruptcy. Visiting him and seeing how the new system had increased his profits heightened my interest in IT. I now live in Canada, where computers continue to play a large role in my daily affairs. I use electronic mail and Internet chats to communicate with both parents, and have chosen management information systems as my course of study. Information technology fascinates me not only because it makes companies more competitive, but also because it can bridge great distances to bring people together. I have much respect for and interest in the IT industry.
Personal satisfaction also plays a key role in my career decision.
While monetary rewards are of practical importance, true job satisfaction springs from the opportunity to grow and learn within an industry. I enjoy acquiring new skills and information, which help me to adapt to the fast-changing world, as well as pique my interest in innovation. In addition, a career with open prospects would give me constant incentive to improve myself and to gain more knowledge. I currently volunteer for an on-campus organization, Job Web, in which I am responsible for posting employment opportunities on the World Wide Web, answering questions and preparing informative handouts. This position has broadened my computing abilities and has improved my interpersonal skills, which are crucial to any business endeavor. I enjoy the sense of productivity and usulness I gain from the work, and feel it is a valuable experience for future employment.
Given the confluence of my personal and professional interests, my goal is to obtain a master s degree and then to work in an IT-related industry, either with a consulting firm or as a systems analyst with a financial institution. In addition to this, I plan to use my private time to attend computer programming courses in order to maintain a competitive knowledge of technology. When I have gathered enough experience and skills, I plan to launch a consulting company of my own.
Attending a Master s of Science program will smooth the path to these goals. Such a program will deepen my expertise and broaden my perspectives. Moreover, the MIS option will help me to hone my skills in IT areas that I have not yet encountered. As I have attended the University of Toronto for four years, I am familiar with and have confidence in the faculty professors whom I believe can help me become an IT professional.
范文二
Examination of any quality newspaper will probably demonstrate that more of the headlines address economic problems than any other topic. The importance and relevance of economic related disciplines to the modern world have led me to want to pursue the study of the subject at a higher level. I am particularly interested in the behaviour of firms and organisations from an economic point of view and I have based my A-level coursework in this field. During my study, I have come across many real life complexities and while attempting to explain these theories, I have developed a keen interest in analysing and understanding how the world of business is influenced by economics.
I have created an economics revision website for A-level and GCSE students. It is primarily intended to help younger students gain an understanding of core economic principles but has also helped me improve my own computer and presentational skills. I regularly read newspapers and economic publications to keep up to date with economic developments and I am able to use my mathematical and analytical skills to apply different economic theories to a range of real-life economic situations.
Last year, I took part in an economics and business project called Young Enterprise in which I set up a small company and sold products to students at our school. I enjoyed the chance to put some of my business economic theory into practice and was able to enhance my management and communication skills. I also gained a distinction in the associated exam.
To gain practical experience in the workplace, I worked for two weeks at a small software company specialising in financial software. I currently have a part time job and this has taught me much about teamwork, responsibility and time management in the workplace.
In my spare time, I enjoy reading, swimming, sketching and solving puzzles and logic problems. I have redesigned and been responsible for the maintenance of my school s website.
I believe that I will gain a highly marketable set of skills from the study of economics at university. I have found economics to be a challenging and diverse discipline and I am interested in both macro and micro economics. It is this variation of perspective, combined with its real world importance, that makes economics an appealing subject to study at university.
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