首先,开头段至少写三句话的这种说法本身就是对学生灌输性的错误。西方国家的写作对开头段实际上没有明确的规定,很多只要你把你的个人观点表示清晰即可。 For example: Some people believe young">
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For example:
Some people believe young adults should undertake unpaid work to help people in the community. Do you think it will bring more drawbacks to the community and young adults than benefits?
一看就是典型的“利弊题”,既然是问做“unpaid work”的利与弊,为了人生观和个人价值观,以及弘扬“正能量”肯定会选择“利大于弊”。那么既然态度这么鲜明,开头段不如直接了当一些,给考官眼前一亮的感觉。
Intro:
I definitely subscribe to the notion that young people should do voluntary or unpaid work to give a hand to the people in the community, because this practice will bring about twofold bonus.
一句话表明态度就好,尤其是definitely一词表明态度的坚定。
其次,我对雅思考生常提到的开头段不要多于50个字或不要超过主体段的长度说法感到很是惊讶,如果是老师提到的,那么这也太中国式的本本主义了甚至是误人子弟。好的雅思作文开头段在西方是没有对长短或字数要求。再说一次,只要把你要说的观点说清楚就好了。当然不要啰嗦。
For example:
Environmental hazards are often too great for particular countries or individuals to tackle. We have arrived at a point in time where the only way to lessen environmental problems is at an international level. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
环保类的作文一直是雅思写作中的重头戏,本篇就是一个典型雅思辩论类。由于题目中出现了绝对词“only”,我相信烤鸭们已看出这是一边倒式文章,OK,那么开头段就一定在“50”字以内吗?
Intro:
Environmental problems have reached such proportions that people feel international organizations must be set up to intervene in world affairs to resolve these problems. Whether this will resolve the problem which is very unlikely as international organizations are just an extension of human behavior. That is, if human conflicts cannot be resolved at home, then they are unlikely to be resolved at the international level. Nevertheless, international organizations do attract attention to the growing problem of pollution and the destruction of the environment. However, although I respect the aims of the international community to resolve the issue of environmental pollution and support their cause, I do not believe it is the best or only way to protect the environment; in fact, it is only a small part of what is needed in a global initiative.
这样的一个近135个字数的开头段,思路清晰,观点明确整篇下来照样可以拿到7.5分以上。记住写作跟喜哥走,保你写出高分。
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