机械工程Ph.D PS选段以及解析

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机械工程Ph.D PS选段以及解析

申请人：崔同学
背景：全国重点大学，测控技术与仪器专业， GPA： 4.02/4.3，TOEFL: 93, GRE: 322+3.0
个人亮点：GPA高，班级排名第一, 课堂实验，学校实习，奖学金
录取学校&专业：UIUC/ University of Connecticut &Ph.D in Mechanical Engineering

文书选段&解析：

选段一：喜欢这个专业的原因

My major at undergraduate level is Measuring & Controlling Technology and Instrument which matches with the major Mechanical Engineering in the States. To be honest, my interest in this major barely showed till sophomore year, and I was attracted by this major deeply after I realized its beauty. During undergraduate study, I have learned that every single part of machine elements is created by reasons. Let us take the hexagon bolt for instance, the reason why it made to hexagon shape that is because it is easy to tighten up by using wrench when meets with resisting force; another example, the both ends of major roots flowmeter are usually notching, even though it seems useless, actually it helps with liquid flowing and reduces the abrasions between end face of waist and internal surface of pedestal, thereby assuring the vital function of flow measurement's accuracy. I concluded these from my past practice experience, and just because this kind of science which perfectly combined theory and practice, appeals to me in every way.

解析：

这一段主要是表述学生在通过本科阶段的学校对要申请的专业的兴趣的培养：为了是摆脱工科男刻板的印象，此段我在表述上在略显柔和，例如：“To be honest, my interest in this major barely showed till sophomore year, and I was attracted by this major deeply after I realized its beauty，中文：虽然上大二之后才慢慢有兴趣，当我认识到了此专业的美丽之处之后就被其深深吸引”。为了体现学生对此专业的喜爱，后面举了两个例子具体来说是如何喜欢&怎么喜欢上的&从中学到了什么。因为两个例子都涉及专业工具，用意在于从细节体现学生对此专业的了解和喜爱还有实操性的突显。类似我对你的喜欢不是说说而已的那个Feel ~

选段二：学术背景
Academically, I believe that I have gained the solid fundamental theories in Measuring & Controlling Technology and Instrument and related knowledge during my undergraduate studies in University of Science and Technology of China. According to my outstanding performance and good academic record at school, I have been obtained scholarships and ranking No. 1 among 63 students in my class, as well as exposed in many experiments endeavors of Measuring & Controlling Technology and Instrument. Specifically, such as Rotation Precision Experimental Design of Center Lathe Spindle in the earlier of this year. During this experiment, I made a systematic analysis of both one-way and bidirectional measurement of the spindle accuracy, and a comparison of measurement standard between standard cylindrical and master ball; I proceeded simulation experiment with Matlab and I picked optimal method by analyzing data processing methods. From this experiment, I experienced a complete process of scientific research, from collecting data and parsing problem to finding solution and making open reply. Besides, I gained a deeper understanding on the concept of rotation precision, as well as practiced my teamwork skills. All of these endowed me a comprehensive view of research world, and reckoned me ready to conduct more advanced and complicated researches in your program.
解析：
这一段是学生学术背景的表述：思路&突出的点：1. 本科阶段基础知识扎实和提及北京科技大学，因为国内知名大学的某些专业在美国高校还是具有一定认知率的外加美国高校也有很多华裔教授，如果学校有偏好的话这算是一个优势。2. 学生在校的优秀表现，奖学金获得者，班级排名第一都提及了一下。3.具体讲述学生在校做过的实验，首先是对实验的简单描述，之后是从中学到了什么&增长了什么并激发自己想在这个领域学习更多的欲望。